I started reading this book with a fair amount of hope – I often find co-written books curious. I like to see if the styles blend well together and if those 2 people work well together you can have an excellent book. It’s almost like having an inbuilt proof reader, everything written is re-read and checked almost as soon as it reaches the page.
As I read, I clung to what did seem appealing. The characters are extremely diverse racially and there’s a broad cast each with their own issues and agendas. There’s a teenaged romance in there which, I expect, would bother me over time but apart from that the underlying concept of the story is an intriguing one – a demon born as a human, unknowing of his past and his heritage, coming of age and into both his power and his memories. As well as facing the actual agenda of his demonic siblings.
The world also looked interesting. While not unique, it had definite suggestions that it was going to be rich and truly epic with one of those grand “the world hangs in the balance” conflicts that always appeals. Yes, I like the epic, I do.
Unfortunately, after 100 pages, I’m afraid I just couldn’t continue. These characters, the plot, and the world is all depressingly defeated by a writing style that wasn’t so much a barrier to enjoyment, but a giant brick wall to understanding.
The sentence structure is stilted. With lots of short sentences. Written like this. Over and over. And it’s really annoying. It’s also very over-written – a man is running down stairs to confront the mob breaking into his home, and we get an elaborate description of the bannister. The wording is, frequently, ridiculously melodramatic and everything is described in excessive, grandiose terms. It actually feels very immature, with its convoluted style, excess description, excess inserts and general difficult sentence structure, and some of the most stilted and clumsy conversations, and most awful info-dumping (including a classic “as you know…” dump) I’ve ever seen.
I have to transcribe a couple of passages to adequately convey why I had such trouble reading this book
“These two figures stood within the expanses of the Underrealm. It was a place veiled in total darkness. No human new what form it was in. If you were one of those who screwed it up, up there, then you went down, down there, where they were waiting for you.”
